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Computers have made it possible for office workers to work remotely instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employers. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Advancements in technology in recent times have changed patterns of
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 in offices. People are of
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 that working remotely has its significant importance,
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 some people believe that it has several shortcomings. The following paragraphs will shed light on both perspectives before expressing my opinion. On one hand, there is an opinion that working from house is favourable for both employers and employees because it has a positive influence on
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-life balance
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 on utilities saving.
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 job allows people to sit in the comfort of their homes and
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 in
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a hassle-free
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 environment. It
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 saves the travel time to offices
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 air and noise pollution caused by transport vehicles. Working from home is
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 advantageous for organizations as they save cost of infrastructure and electricity bills.
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, remote
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 has a few shortcomings,
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, at home, there might be kids and family causing disturbance which can divert the focus of the worker. There can
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 be several other distractions like Television, mobile, food or unexpected guests. One other drawback which was reported during times of
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 was a higher divorce rate and domestic fights because all over the world remote
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 protocol was followed. So partners would be together all day, and there was a higher ratio of fights. So, in conclusion,
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 am of the opinion that there should be flexibility and balance in working from the office and remote
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.
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, workers should be allowed to
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 from home for 5 days in a month or one day in a week. In
this
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 way, it will not be hectic for both employer and worker.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer topic sentences at the start of each paragraph. This helps guide the reader through your points.
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Make sure to support your ideas with more specific examples or evidence. This will strengthen your arguments.
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Check for grammar errors, especially with capitalization and punctuation, to improve clarity and professionalism.
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You presented both sides of the argument well, which is important for IELTS writing.
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Your ideas about work-life balance and cost savings were relevant and clear.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • work remotely
  • flexible schedule
  • work-life balance
  • happier employees
  • save money
  • reduce costs
  • office supplies
  • higher productivity
  • wider talent pool
  • skilled workers
  • feelings of isolation
  • distractions
  • effective communication
  • time management
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