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The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030.

The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030.
The given line graph illustrates changes in the utility of
oil
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 in 4 different regions from 2009 to 2025, and future predictions in 2030.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that US and Western Europe
along with
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 Japan saw a downward trend,
whereas
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 China and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East experienced an opposite trend, and these trends are expected to continue in the future. Across all 4 milestones,
US
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the US
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 maintained the greatest
oil
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 utility.
While
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 the use of
oil
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 in Western Europe and Japan
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 anticipated to observe a moderate fall from 4
million
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 to just over 2 by the end of the period, the consumption of
oil
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 in
US
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the US
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 stayed the same at 10
million
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 from 2009 to 2015 before witnessing a gradual drop to just over 4
million
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 of barrels per day in 2030. Turning to the remaining statistics, both areas followed a similar upward pattern. The amount of
oil
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 in China and
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the MIddle
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MIddle
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Middle
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 East rose from roughly 2
million
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 to about 3.8 and 3
million
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, respectively. It is predicted that in 2030, the figures for China and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East will be approximately the same at 3
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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