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Some people think that all unviersity students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 of
knowledge
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 that
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student
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students
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 can learn
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this day
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these days
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.
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While some
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Some
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 argue that
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student
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students
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 in university can learn any
subject
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 they
interested
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are interested
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 in. Some people believe that
knowledge
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relate
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related
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 to science and
technology
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are
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 better
learn
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learned
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provision
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a provision
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 for the
future
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both
view
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views
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 before presenting my opinion.
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Student
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Students
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 in university can choose which kind of other
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 they want to learn more,
for instance
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,
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a student
the student
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student
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students
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 who
take
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economic
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economics
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 as
main
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the main
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 study program can
also
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 learn law as additional
knowledge
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.
Student
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 can choose
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subject
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subjects
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 that make them
interest
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interested
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 and they know that
knowledge
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 will give them
benefit
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benefits
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 in expanding their understanding. It is unlimited with allied
scineces
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sciences
science
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 it will give wider sight.
Student
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 must know that in one phenomenon many perspectives
influenced
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are influenced
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, so
others
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other
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knowldge
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knowledge
 must be learned to increase their ability
in solving
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to solve
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 a problem.
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, some people believe that even many subjects that
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student
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students
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 in university can choose,
however
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,
scinece
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science
 and
technology
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 are the most important to learn more deeply. Those subjects will give many benefits in the
future
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,
many
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and many
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development
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developments
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 relate to both
knowledge
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.
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, Biotechnology is one of
sciences
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the sciences
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 that
give
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gives
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 us
a
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the
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 reality that something
imposible
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impossible
 in the past will be
posible
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possible
 in
this
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 day. Biotechnology
give
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gives
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 evidence, one of them is colourful fruit
such
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 as purple papaya, or red banana. Many
people
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people are
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 sure that in the
future
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the
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apply
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development will
faster
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be faster
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that
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than
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 nowadays. In my opinion, science and
technology
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are
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will
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playing
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play
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 an important role
for
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in
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 the
future
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,
however
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, we should know that
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future
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the future
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 is not about
technology
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 but about what will happen next. It
is relate
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is related
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 to social life,
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student
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students
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also
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 must learn about how to give
benefit
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benefits
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 to
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their surrounding
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surrounding
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surroundings
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. So, in sum,
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student
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the student
a student
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 must learn
other
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another subject
other subjects
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subject
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 than only their main
subject
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 to make their sight wider and give
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a multidisipliner
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multidisipliner
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multidisciplinary
 view.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion. This helps the reader understand your position.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to show the main idea.
task achievement
You have included examples to support your points, which is good for your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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