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Some people think that children should learn how to cook at school. Others believe that cooking is a waste of school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that cooking should be taught in schools because it is a useful skill for children. Others think that it is not necessary and takes time from more important subjects.
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 essay will look at both sides and give my opinion. On one side, cooking is a good life skill for children. When they grow up, they will need to cook for themselves and their families. It
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 helps them learn about healthy food and how to avoid junk food.
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, if they know how to cook vegetables, they may eat them more often
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 of fast food. On the other side, some people say that school time should be for learning science, math, and languages. They think that cooking can be learned at home and that schools should focus on academic subjects.
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, not all students enjoy cooking, so it may be boring for some of them. In my opinion, cooking is a useful skill, but I agree it should not take too much school time. Maybe it can be part of one class per week or an after-school activity.

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Try to give more examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your ideas connect smoothly from one to the next.
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Strengthen your conclusion to summarize your main points clearly.
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You clearly state your opinion and discuss both sides of the argument.
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs are well organized and focus on a main idea.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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