Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and five your own

There is an ongoing debate whether boys and girls should learn in separate
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or not.
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some people
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that multi-sex
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students
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both genders experience real-world socialization,
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critics argue that single-sex
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will reduce
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gender
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stereotypes
. In
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essay, I will explain why I feel that both genders
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should be taught in one school will help students sense the equality in their genders. Those who prioritise multi-sex
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argue that if males and females are learning together, they can enhance their real-life experience.
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, when those boys come to the real world, they will meet some female co-workers so if they did not work with girls at
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young age, they would not know how to work with female co-workers at
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older age. Le Thanh Tong
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shool
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school
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in Vietnam,
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, that school force the boys to stay away from the girls, particularly in lessons. As a
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, most students in
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school
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struggle to interact with
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gender when they reach
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the university
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Task Achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your position on the topic right away.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on linking your ideas more clearly. Use transitional words to connect sentences and paragraphs.
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Provide more examples to support your points, especially examples from real life or studies.
Coherence and Cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling to improve the clarity of your writing and ensure accuracy.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider adding a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your opinion clearly.
Task Achievement
You present a clear opinion on the topic.
Task Achievement
You provide a real example from a school to support your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • single-sex schools
  • mixed-gender education
  • gender-specific teaching techniques
  • stereotypes
  • real-world preparation
  • distraction-free environment
  • holistic development
  • social integration
  • interpersonal skills
  • collaborative learning
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