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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Number of shop closures and openings 2011-2018 Closures - Openings 2011 2012 2013 2014 2015 2016 2017 2018

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Number of shop closures and openings 2011-2018 Closures - Openings 2011 2012 2013 2014 2015 2016 2017 2018
The line chart provides key data about the
shops
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 that closed and opened in one country from 2011 to 2018. The units are measured in thousands.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that in 2011, the new
shops
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 had the largest
number
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 of openings.
In addition
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, the sum of the
shops
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 that closed was the highest in 2013,
whereas
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, the least
number
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 of
stores
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 were recorded in 2015.
According to
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 what is shown in 2012, the
number
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 of places closed was around 6,000, increasing gradually to 7,000 in 2013,
then
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 slightly decreasing to 6,500 in the next year.
Furthermore
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, in 2015, the
number
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 of
shops
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 significantly declined to 900
stores
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, and majorly soared to approximately 5,000
shops
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 and maintained the figure for the next three years. In terms of places that opened after the sudden decrease in 2012, it gradually increased by 2,000 figures, resulting in newly opened 6,000
shops
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 in two years.
However
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, in 2015, it rapidly decreased to 4,000
stores
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 and remained stable for the next two years and decreased slightly to 3,000
stores
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 in 2018.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, number, stores with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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