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You will be graduating from university and would like to invite your family to the ceremony. Write a letter of invitation to your parents. In the letter: - Explain that you have completed your studies - Give details of the event, including time, date and dress code - Let them know how many tickets they have and who they are for

Dear
parents
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, I'm super excited to announce that I'
ve
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 completed my course with flying
colors
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, and now I'm inviting you to attend my graduating ceremony next week. I'
ve
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 completed my degree in Business Marketing
in
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at
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 one of the prominent universities in our area.
As you
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You
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 always wanted me to complete my course
from
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at
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this
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 university, and I exactly remember those days when were struggling to reserve a seat in
this
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 course.
This
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 graduating ceremony is going to
held
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 on 5th
june
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June
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 at 11.30 am in our
college
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's biggest hall. The event will start with some stage performances from our
college
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 students including me.
I'
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ve
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 participated in a traditional dance which I was learning in our
college
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 academy
from
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for
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last
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the last
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 1 year. Fortunately, I'
ve
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 got five tickets as a bonus
of
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for
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 passing with
highest
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the highest
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 marks. One more important thing,
parents
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' presence is very crucial, so I would like to see you both on that day.
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, you can
also
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 bring
grand
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grandparents
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parents
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 with you at
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 proud moment. Apart from that, our
college
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 has set a dress code for outsiders which is
blue
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a blue
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 shirt and white
pant
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pants
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 to differentiate between
parents
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 and students. Again,
I'
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I
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m
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'm
 very excited not only because of
my
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this
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 ceremony but
also
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 to see you all. Love, Amanjot Kaur.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to organize your ideas more clearly in each paragraph.
task achievement
Add a bit more detail about your feelings or what this event means to you.
positive
The letter has a warm and inviting tone.
positive
You've included important details about the ceremony.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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