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Nowadays, it has become a trend among people to leave their own country to work or live abroad.People choose to work in countries which are more developed than their own for higher standards of living.In this essay, I will discuss that working and settling in other nations has more advantages than disadvantages.

Living abroad has
became
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 an important thing
between
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 people in a big part worldwide,people usually prefer living and working abroad
instead
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 of
stucking
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studying
 in their own
country
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.
it
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 has a lot of
beneficial
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,especially when you get
in
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 a rich
country
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 like
U.S
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the U.S
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,
Canda
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Canada
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 and
UK
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the UK
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 too. Nowadays if you are living in a poor
country
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that
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 might be
more tough
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 to get
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a perstigious
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perstigious
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prestigious
 education or
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high quality
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of
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treatment.
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,you can survive and live a better life with a little bit of fun. To be honest,living abroad has more than
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one advantage
as
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such
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 a modern and healthy life.
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Also
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 you could be able to gain
a
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citizenship if paid a lot of taxes and lived up to six years in many countries.
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,you could be more able to help your parents in your own
country
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,
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and bring them a better life. You would struggle with some issues and face problems,
on the other hand
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,that might help you and make you more able to deal with your falls easily,whether
if
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you handle
with
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that for you first time.

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The essay addresses the topic and presents the writer’s opinion clearly.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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