You have recently moved to a new city for work. Write a letter to a friend about your move. In your letter: describe the new city and your job explain why you moved invite your friend to visit

Dear Jack, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to tell you the great news that I moved to
Riyadh
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, The capital of Saudi Arabia Because
for
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my new job is
financial
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a financial
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analyst.
This
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is my fifth day here and
Riyadh
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is a fantastic city with great places
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as
:
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boulevard world, Kingdom Arena, and Golden Stadium. As a financial analyst, I always have been interested in numbers, analysis, and ratios. Now I feel it's a dream because
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job is great. First of all. I moved here because
Riyadh
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is a brilliant city,
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I have an offer for my dream job. These reasons are more than enough to bring me here in
Riyadh
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.
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, we have here a lot of good places to enjoy with it like the black stamp. I would love to see you here in
capital
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of Saudi Arabia to enjoy with us.
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, Sami, Rami, and Yousef will come to my new home. So I really want you to come with all of us to enjoy at my home. After that, we will go hang out and we will go to a lot of great places together. Now everything is clear and I would love to see everything go as planned. You all are welcome to visit
Riyadh
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and have fun guys. See you soon. Best wishes, Azzam

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Add a more clear introduction to explain the purpose of the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect ideas better between sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph focuses on one main idea.
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Your enthusiasm about your new job is very clear.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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