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The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2011 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2011 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the number of followers (in millions) for eight prominent Instagram influencers between 2011 and 2021.
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, four influencers experienced a consistent upward trend in their follower counts over the given period,
while
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 the other four showed a general decline.
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, the rates of increase and decrease varied considerably among them. Cristiano Ronaldo began the decade with a relatively modest following but saw a dramatic surge by 2018, reaching approximately 100
million
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 followers. By 2021, his follower count had skyrocketed to over 300
million
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, making him the most followed Instagram influencer during the period.
Similarly
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, other influencers
such
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 as Rock (Dwayne Johnson), Kylie Jenner, Ariana Grande, and Selena Gomez all showed significant growth.
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, Ariana Grande had around 101
million
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 followers in 2018, which rose sharply to 250
million
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 by 2021. Kylie Jenner and Selena Gomez followed a nearly identical trajectory, each increasing from about 100–105
million
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 in 2018 to nearly 250
million
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 by 2021.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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