The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.
The bar chart illustrates the worldwide
sales
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figures (in billions of dollars) for
game
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software
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, CDs, and DVDs or videos between 2000 and 2003.
Overall
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, CDs
achieve
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achieved
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their highest
sales
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in 2000 and
then
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start
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started
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to decrease over the four years.
In contrast
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, both
game
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software
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and
DVD
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/video
sales
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saw consistent growth, with DVDs almost equally
sales
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in 2003 to CDs . In 2000, CD
sales
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were approximtly
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approximtly
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approximately
$35
billion
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, significantly higher than
DVD
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/video and games
software
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, which were under $20
billion
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and around $15
billion
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, respectively. Over the next three years, CD
sales
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started
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started to
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decrease
untill
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until
arrive
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about
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at about
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$ 30
billion
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by 2003. The
sales
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of
game
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software
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expands
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by years , reaching nearly $15
billion
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by the end of the period.
DVD
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/video
sales
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have similar growth,
excueed
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excused
exceed
executed
game
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software
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sales
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in 2003 with close to $35
billion
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. By 2003, the gap between CD and
DVD
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have
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was
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significantly close to each
others
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other
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, at the same time, the gap between
game
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sales
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and the two categories
around
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was around
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$15
billoin
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billion
.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, game, software, dvd, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trends
  • global sales
  • media types
  • software
  • significant increase
  • decline
  • popularity
  • consumer preferences
  • technological advancements
  • peak sales
  • growth rates
  • fluctuations
  • digital technology
  • traditional media
  • digital downloads
  • streaming services
  • consumer habits
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