the line graph below shows china‘s population by age group starting in 1960 and icluding a forecast to 2050.

the line graph below shows china‘s population by age group starting in 1960 and icluding a forecast to 2050.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the line graph below shows china‘s population by age group starting in 1960 and icluding a forecast to 2050.
The line graph provides information about the percentage of China‘s
population
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divided by age group , the 0-14, 15-64 and 65plus between 1960 and 2050.
Overall
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, the
population
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of 15-64 and 65plus rose significantly throughout the year,
whilethe
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while the
0-14
population
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percentage declined sharply over the period, 0-14 age group
rate
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was high but fell leading it to be the lowest percentage,
on the other hand
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, 15-64
population
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number ,became the highest
rate
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by the end of the cycle . In 1960, the 14-64 and 65plus ratios were almost 5% and 35% respectively, from that point 15-64
rate
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showed a remarkable increase achieving a peak at approximately 70% in 2020 and
continued
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reaching about 52.5% in 2050.
similarly
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65plus
rate
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climb incrementally attaining above 17.5% in 2050 .
however
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,the 0-14
rate
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dropped dramatically becoming the lowest point at 17.5 in 2050

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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