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the plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today.

The map illustrates the differences in the Porth
Harbour
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 design between 2000 and the present day.
Overall
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, Porth
Harbour
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 has undergone significant changes as it has two docks now on the north
side
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, the fishing boats are turned into marina private yachts, and on the south
side
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 what once was a public beach is turned into a private one. In 2000, on the north
side
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, the
harbour
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 had only one dock, and on the west
side
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 of it was the marina private yacht. It was moved to the south
side
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 and now was replaced by a fishing boats area. The
harbour
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 today has two showers area both on the west
side
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. Previously, there were not any shops or cafes, but now there are and it is on the south
side
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 near the road. After the redevelopment, a hotel was added next to the private beach on the east-south of the Porth
Harbour
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph flows well to the next one. Use linking words to help the reader follow your ideas.
task achievement
Give more details about the changes and describe what impact they have had.
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Be clear about what was on the south and north side in both years. It will help the reader understand the changes better.
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You clearly describe the main changes in the harbour.
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Your comparisons between 2000 and today are noted, showing that you understand the changes well.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multi-purpose building
  • recreational facilities
  • maritime safety
  • leisure destination
  • tourism-focused
  • infrastructure improvements
  • pedestrian promenade
  • landmark
  • expanded roads
  • transport infrastructure
  • industrial use
  • cruise ship terminal
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