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The graph shows average annual expenditure on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows average annual expenditure on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The aforementioned line chart represents money spent
for
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on
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phone
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 services and residential
phone
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 services in a year, from 2001 to 2010. In the big picture, it is conspicuous that both modes have a different trend, an increasing trend for cell
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phone
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phones
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 and a downward tendency for another
service
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. Focusing on the cell
phone
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service
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, in 2001, the report showed that
this
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 method contributed the lowest statistic at $200,
however
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,
this
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 continued to skyrocket until above $700
at the end
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 of
period
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, surpassing the
residental
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residential
phone
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service
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 in 2006 at around $500.
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, the remained category showed
that
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apply
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a dramatic decline
of
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in
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 the
anual
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annual
 expenditure in the observed periods, starting at the highest point ($700), decreasing gradually by $300, and touching the bottom at $400. Even though in the first year residential
phone
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service
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 was the most popular option
choosen
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chosen
 by individuals, people tended to change their preferences and subscribed
another
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to another
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 communication method.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, service with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average
  • expenditure
  • cell phone
  • residential phone
  • services
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • spending
  • surpassed
  • gap
  • preferences
  • shift
  • changes
  • technology
  • usage
  • patterns
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