It has been known that the use of automobiles contributes to environmental harm; however, the number of car-making industries and he frequency of driving are still on the climb. What are the reasons and how to reverse this trend?

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people have become more prone to own cars than before. That leads to
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the companies to produce more cars
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, the negative effect of
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phenomenon on the
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environment
. In the coming
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I will discuss the causes and the solutions for
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trend.
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, the fast pace
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the most common cause. In
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, people
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speed and urgency to the
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finished.
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, people do not prefer to use public transportation anymore
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because
they spend more time than when they use
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their
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of
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desire to buy
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the industries
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, when more cars
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and
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the profit of the companies will increase.
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, Toyota's profit range is 25000 billion per year. To get
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of
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, the government should offer
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educational
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courses
about the air pollution from vehicles and how it affects our health.
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,
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the
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community
to use buses and trains most of the time and how
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positive
the effect on decreasing pollution.
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, some jobs can be from home and
this
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change will reduce
automobiles
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consumption. For
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, jobs like graphic design, IT, and data entry can work from home.
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the end,
automobiles
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automobile
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buying expansion
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major damage
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the individual's mental and physical health and the cons are more than
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pros.

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task achievement
Improve the introduction by clearly stating the main points you will discuss.
coherence
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea. Use topic sentences to guide the reader.
coherence
Use more connecting words and phrases (like 'firstly', 'for example', 'however') to enhance the flow between ideas.
task achievement
You have a clear understanding of the topic and present relevant reasons and solutions.
task achievement
Your examples are real and connect to the points you've made.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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