Some believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish

As we know, developing countries are producing increasing numbers of working professionals in many areas and among them, doctors and engineers are considered some of the most valuable assets to the
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. Some
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have views that these workers should remain and contribute their
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in the
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where they were trained,
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others argue that the collectives should be given the freedom to choose to
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in different parts of the world. In my opinion, these
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have the
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to decide where they want to
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. First and foremost, having professionals to serve in the
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is certainly crucial to the advancement of the
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. Medical, health, and
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are major sectors which make significant
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contributions
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to the economy of the nation. A stable economy and
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services,
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, in hospitals will help the
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to gain global recognition.
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, the
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will face
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in important
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if
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number of trainees leave the
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.
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, some
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believe that those young
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should be free to choose to pursue their career in another
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path is the individual’s personal choice. There are many different reasons why
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in their early
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journey globally. One of the reasons
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strong
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in exploring other countries
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working especially, those who
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to build strong connections with
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community and
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knowledge of the world.
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, gaining professional experience from a different
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will increase their demand for other jobs in future.
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work
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environment is more challenging
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of our own
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because they will be forced to step out of
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zone in an unfamiliar place, thereby broadening
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necessary
skills required in the field of
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making them better candidates for challenging roles in the future.
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, in my opinion, it is important to allow young professionals to make independent choices in careers for their own development. In conclusion, even though working in own
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has its own positive contribution to the
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growth and advancement of the nation, the choice of whether to gain professional experience in their own
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or
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worldwide
should be in the individuals’
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