In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In recent years, thanks to globalization, people have used to buying different items imported from all over the world.
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, there are a lot of unusual and even exotic
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on the store shelves.Some people claim that
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is a positive trend
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, from my perspective is
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one which leads to the deterioration of the environment. On the one hand, the diversity of
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in shops is definitely a big advantage for the population.
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people can find any ingredients without problem to cook different dishes and enjoy various flavours given nature.
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the fact that London is
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a multionational
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multionational
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multinational
city, you can easily find your national dishes, in a blink of an eye, no matter where you are from.
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, for many
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helps
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at home and preserve their traditions and cuisine.
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, there are a lot of concerns that transporting food thousands of kilometres
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the quality of
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but
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cause
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a great amount of exhaust emissions. These gases pollute our surroundings and have an influence on climate change.
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,
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development
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has a negative effect on local producers, by
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competitiveness and decreasing demand
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season
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products
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.
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, farmers suffer from low income and must close their farms down, which leads to exacerbate the economic situation. In conclusion,
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some individuals claim that a wide variety of
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in the shops broaden people’s diet and better their lives, I believe that
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trend leads to the impairment of
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the environment
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by increasing greenhouse gas emissions.

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Work on clearly stating your opinion in the introduction. Make sure to explain why you think it is negative.
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Try to have a clear flow of ideas. Use linking words to connect your thoughts better.
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You provide a good overview of both sides of the argument.
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Your introduction clearly presents the topic of discussion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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  • for instance
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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