There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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letter to you to relay some difficulties I have witnessed in the past couple of weeks with
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number 502 in the Brampton area where
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live. I have explained to you clearly, that I have to take the 502
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from the main Williams stop to Sheridan
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,
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not only arrives late daily but is
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out of service it happened to me
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few weeks and
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I am
fully frustrated with
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service.
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,
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,
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have missed my important classes daily which affects my study.
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,
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week was my final test but
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have missed it and got zero grades on my exam so
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was very unfair to me. As you know, it is the responsibility of your department and drivers that they arrive on time in case the
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services are not working so they give some information regarding the time of buses of their
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route. Apart from that, I suggest that you have to update buses' times when they arrive
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provide some handful information in case buses are delayed on Google Maps. I think
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idea works and you understand the problem of me and other local people. I look forward to hearing from you soon . yours faithfully Jaswinder Kaur

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to separate your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
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Add more specific examples of how the bus delays have affected your daily routine.
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Use more formal language, especially in addressing the manager.
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Your letter has a clear purpose and addresses the main issue which is great!
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You provided a suggestion for improvement, which shows you care about the service.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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