Some people believe that planing for the future is a waste of time because they think that focusing on the present is more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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crucial role in
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. Few individuals think that thinking about
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time
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is useless
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because they opine that, they should focus on the present
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is very crucial. I
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partilly
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agree with
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statement. I believe that people should work on
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present days for
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achieving
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in upcoming
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. As far as the former view of the statement ,
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believe that person must
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for their future by saving their money and
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money in different businesses . which can help in their hard
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and
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their
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easy .
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, making goals for upcoming years
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their mental horizon . It
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desires in their mind, resulting
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work
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hard
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fulfilling
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it
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.
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, if pupils
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arrangements
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time
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then
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they can prepare themselves for facing difficulties in
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forthcoming
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,
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think that thinking about the
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makes them responsible towards their
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and family.
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people must do work to make them perfect by gaining knowledge and skills . which can help them to face every situation in every field.
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, Individuals should
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focus
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. Because if they are working hard today,
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they can able to get goals tomorrow.
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a doctor
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later . But
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present
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time
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she is
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concentrated
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stitching and beauty courses. To
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,
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would reckon that pupils must adopt
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approach towards the hereafter by working on
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days
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holistic growth in all walks of
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.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion. You can say 'I partly agree' more explicitly.
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs need clearer topic sentences. Each paragraph should have a main idea that is easy to see.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use correct grammar and spelling. There are several errors that make understanding harder.
task achievement
You expressed a clear opinion in your essay.
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You provided examples from your own life, which helps to support your ideas.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • unexpected expenses
  • career advancement
  • long-term goals
  • structured approach
  • personal development
  • educational goals
  • fulfilling life
  • spontaneous experiences
  • emotional fulfillment
  • embrace opportunities
  • mental health
  • reduce stress and anxiety
  • mindfulness
  • balanced approach
  • flexibility and adaptation
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