Some people think that working from home is more beneficial for employees and companies, while others believe that it reduces productivity and communication. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In recent years, there has been growing debate over remote working. Some
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argue
that it has more advantages.
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others believe that it can make employees less productive. In my opinion, working
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remotely
can increase
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time management skills.
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essay will discuss both
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perspectives
presenting my own view. On the one hand, many
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support the idea of working
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remotely
.
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, They
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argue
that remote working is more
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time-efficient
.
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, studies have
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shown
that during Covid19 the rate of productivity increased to 20% more
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remote working.
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often results
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less traffic.
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, it is understandable why some
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hold
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opinion.
On the other hand
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, others believe that working from home has
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impact on workers. One strong
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argument
for
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is that it can
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the workers' productivity and their communication skills.
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,
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that
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usually work from home can face some difficulties
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with other
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properly.
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can lead to
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generation with weak life skills.
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,
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prespective
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perspective
also
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has valid reasoning behind it. In conclusion, both sides present reasonable arguments.
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some
people
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support
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remote
working and
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others
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find it harmful to the society. Personally, I believe that we should consider both options and already many companies
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at least 10 days of working from home to their employees, as it offers a more practical and balanced solution in the
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run

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