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The diagram below shows how instant noodle are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodle are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of how
instant
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noodles
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 are produced until it is ready to be sold.
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, the process of making
instant
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noodles
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 had to pass 8 well-structured steps (storage silos, mixer,
dough
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 sheets,
dough
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 strips, noodle discs, cooking & drying, vegetables & spices, and labelling with sealing) from the raw ingredients into well-packaged cups of
instant
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noodles
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.
Main
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 ingredient of
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the noodle
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noodle
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noodles
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, flour, was carried by trucks from storage silos into
mixer
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the mixer
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 in order to be added with water and oil to become
dough
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. Before it
stripped
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, the
dough
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 passed through its sheets to be cut
in
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 the symmetric size or regular shape of
instant
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noodles
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.
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the
dough
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 which had
stripped
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coming
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came
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 to be shaped by the
discs
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disc
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 equipment followed by
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 steps, cooking and drying. In these couple of steps, the
dough
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were
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 processed to be ready for packaging and
labeling
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labelling
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. The
noodle
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noodles
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,
then
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, packaged in cups with
the
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apply
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seasoning
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seasonings
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such
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 as vegetables and spices. Before the
instant
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noodles
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 were ready to be distributed, the labels had to be printed on the cups followed by the good cover to make sure they were all well-sealed.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words instant, noodles, dough with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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