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Societies would benefit from a ban on all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. Do you agree or disagree?

Since the early 2000s, advertisements have become significantly widespread. It is widely believed that advertisements do not have any
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impact some
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indviduals
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individuals
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, societies contend that strict regulation should be implemented to eliminate its impact. I totally disagree with
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prominence for
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. The advertisements have essential messages in favour of awareness. Several charities collaborate with governments to raise public awareness through
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. In today's world, telecommunication systems and technological infrastructure help to encourage
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 to get rid of some bad addictions
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, these
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 show
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 how to quit these addictions in an effective way by using some filters.
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, some local shops use
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 on social media to make a profit and gain popularity. Social platforms
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 as Instagram, Twitter, and TikTok play a crucial role in individuals' lives.
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, some Instagram accounts have more than a million followers. They influence
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 to follow other accounts that they advertise.
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, a new occupation has been announced which is named 'influencer'.
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 to purchase something or follow other accounts for
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. Specifically, social media adverts have become their financial resources. In conclusion, even though some individuals support that bans or limitations are essential to undermine their effect, I strongly believe that
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 have good impacts as much as it has bad impacts.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your position in the introduction.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to help guide the reader.
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Add more specific examples to support your points.
content
You highlighted both positive and negative aspects of advertising.
structure
Your essay has a clear conclusion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer choice
  • informed decisions
  • economic growth
  • job losses
  • innovation
  • competition
  • public awareness campaigns
  • perpetuate stereotypes
  • unrealistic expectations
  • unhealthy lifestyles
  • targeted digital advertising
  • consumer privacy
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