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The chart and table below give information about exercise and absenteeism in two departments of a major company, Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about exercise and absenteeism in two departments of a major company, Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart and table below provide information about
hours
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 of exercise per week and absenteeism
though
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through
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 illness in
Birmingham
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 and
London
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 departments in 2012.
Overall
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, as more employees in
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Birmingham
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the Birmingham
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department
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 do exercises per week, the less they were absent
due to
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 illness in the comparison with
London
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department
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.
According to
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 the information, 15
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percent
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per cent
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 of respondents from
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Birmingham
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the Birmingham
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department
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 spend less than 5
hours
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for
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on
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exercises
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exercise
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,
while
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 35
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percent
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per cent
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 from
London
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one
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apply
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do the same. From 5 to 10 and from 10 to 15
hours
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 of exercise per week spend 50 and 25
percent
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 of
employee
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employees
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 from
Birmingham
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 respectively. At the same
time
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time,
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 only 47 and 10
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percent
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per cent
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 from
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London
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the London
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department
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 spend the same
hours
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 doing exercises. It is a straight correlation between
healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle and
number
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the number
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 of work absences
due to
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 illness. 380
Birmingham
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’s employees
have
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had
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 no absenteeism in 2012.
London
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’s ones have
smaller
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a smaller
the smaller
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 number – 158
persons
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people
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 that did not
skipped
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skip
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the
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apply
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work during the year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, birmingham, london, department, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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