The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the water cycle in both forested and urban areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates the rotation of rain in two places which are
forest
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and city.
Overall
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,
this
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process contained six steps,
started
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starting
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by
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with
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liquid's
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liquid
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precipitation and
ended
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ending
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by
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with
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runoff out
the
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of the
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area,
Initially
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, water precipitates and drops on the surface, which is divided into two layers: Permeable and Less permeable subsoil on rock.
Secondly
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, water infiltrated
to
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apply
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the soil,
while
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there was comprehensive infiltration in
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forest
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the forest
a forest
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,
in contrast
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, infiltration
reduced
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was reduced
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in urban areas
due to
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the cover on the surface.
Similarly
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, baseflow in the
forest
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is reduced in the city.
Lastly
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, the moisture runs out
the
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of the
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place, in Runoff, liquid runs straight out of the wood place,
however
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, increased erosion and polluted runoff in urban areas.
REgard
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According
to the air, which
divided
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is divided
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in two ways when
water
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the water
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dropped
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drops
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, in here liquid
evaporated
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evaporates
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then
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transpirated
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transpired
transported
. In the
last
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2 steps,
its
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it
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happened
similarly
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.
In contrast
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, in urban areas, evaporation and transpiration reduced when
it
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they
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did not happen in
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forest
Fix the agreement mistake
forests
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due to
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plants' appearance.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to, in contrast, similarly".
Vocabulary: Replace the words forest with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Precipitation
  • Absorption
  • Groundwater recharge
  • Evapotranspiration
  • Surface runoff
  • Impervious surfaces
  • Concrete
  • Asphalt
  • Stormwater systems
  • Vegetation
  • Water vapor
  • Local climate conditions
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