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Make sure to check spelling and grammar carefully.
coherence
Try to organize your ideas in a clearer way. Each paragraph should focus on one main point.
task achievement
Use more specific examples to support your arguments.
task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
task achievement
You have presented both sides of the argument.
coherence
Your conclusion includes a personal view, which is good.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite