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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Living in a
country
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 where the
language
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 is different from our mother tongue comes with various
challenges
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. Many believe that there are different social and practical difficulties in speaking for anyone who lives in a foreign
country
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. I vehemently agree
due to
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 the social deprivation and various
challenges
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 in daily routine. One of the main
problems
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 of speaking a foreign
language
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 abroad is social deprivation. Anyone who lives and works in a foreign
country
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 should be able to speak like their native. Other than that, it will be hard to find friends or good colleagues, which will cause many social and personal
problems
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.
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, without being able to find close friends and spend time with them, people begin to withdraw from society and try to spend most of their time alone, because they cannot communicate properly with native speakers. Gradually they might be at the risk of many mental diseases including depression which will make their loneliness even worse. Another reason is daily routine
problems
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. When someone lives in a foreign
country
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, he/she has to deal with various daily
challenges
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.
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, individuals need to find a proper job to make a living, and at the same time think about their accommodation and many other necessities. All of which need to be able to speak fluently. Without being able to contact the natives properly, people might not live normally and even a small work becomes a time-consuming and frustrating challenge for them.
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, when people are not able to talk properly, finding a job will be difficult and
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, they have to work in places which need the least amount of communication and offer lower salaries. In conclusion, living in a foreign
country
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 with a different
language
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 has many social and practical
challenges
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.
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 the risks of having a lonely life and dealing with many routine
problems
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, it is very difficult to live where its
language
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 is different from ours.

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Add more details to your introduction to clearly state your opinion.
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Your introduction clearly presents the topic and states your opinion.
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You have identified key problems faced by individuals in foreign countries.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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