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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There are some social and practical
problems
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 for anyone who decides to live in a country
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where he/she has to speak a foreign
language
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. I vehemently agree
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 the high risks of social
depriviation
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deprivation
as well as
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 limited
job
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 opportunities. One of the main
problems
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 of living in a state where people have to speak
in
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another
language
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 is
the
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social isolation. In order for humans to be happy and sociable, they have to be able to communicate with others. Being able to speak fluently is a necessary requirement in
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 regard. When someone struggles to speak with others, it will be difficult for that person to get along well with people.
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, an immigrant who cannot speak fluently
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 will find it hard to make friends and colleagues,
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, gradually,
this
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 person becomes isolated from others
as well as
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 the community and eventually, might suffer from mental diseases
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 depression. Another problem is having various practical
problems
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including
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job
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 opportunities. Working in any sector needs a substantial amount of
language
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experties
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expertise
.
This
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language
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 is far more complicated and
specialized
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 than just basic communication.
Almost in
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each
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every
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 country, the
job
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 vacancies
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 for the
natives
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 are limited.
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, an immigrant should not only be able to speak generally, but
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 should be able to use occupational
language
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 as well. If
this
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 does not happen, the immigrant has no choice but to work in sectors which are not related to his/her education and need the least amount of communication, which
obviousley
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obviously
 offer lower
wage
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. In conclusion, living in a country where people have to speak other than their
mother-tongue
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, comes with some important social and practical
problems
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, including social
depriviation
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deprivation
as well as
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job
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 opportunities.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly present your main points in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words to connect your ideas better.
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Try to give more detailed examples to support your points.
content
You clearly stated that you agree with the statement, which gives your essay a clear focus.
structure
Your introduction and conclusion are well-structured and clearly present your main argument.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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