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Band 5

Your local newspaper wants to reward people who have contributed a lot to the community. Write a letter to the newspaper. In your letter: suggest someone who deserves the reward mention what they have done to help the community say what reward you would like to give this person

Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to mention a person who is contributing to
society
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 from every corner. I am residing in XG
society
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 on Hurontario and
Englinton
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Eglinton
 road. It is very famous for
the
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its
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 neat and clean environment.
Along with
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this
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,
security
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the security
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 system around my
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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 is quite good. I would like to contribute the credit behind
this
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 to one of my
society
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 old
society
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member
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members
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. He is name is Mr. Sam and is
retired
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a retired
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 army officer. He had served his 40 years
to
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in
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 the service. After their
retirement
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retirement,
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 they moved to our
society
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 and he
is
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has been
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 living in your
society
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from
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for
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last
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the last
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 3 to 4 years. Our
societ
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society
 has changed
alot
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a lot
 once he
become
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becomes
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 secretary. Before, the environment was good
such
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 as there
was
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were
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 no plants and trees around our home. He planted
hundred
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hundreds
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 of new flowers and plants. Since that time every individual
is
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has been
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 taking care of
that
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those
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 plants from my
society
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.
Moreover
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, more than four houses were robbed before but he built
very
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a very
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 strong security system. No one can enter my house without
security
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a security
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 code. Since
,
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apply
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 he came to our
society
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, it has
been
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apply
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changed a lot. I would like to recommend
to appreciate
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appreciating
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 him with
the
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a
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 lot of respect and
give
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giving
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 him
reward
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the reward
a reward
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of
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for
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 the appreciation. Please let me know if you would like to know more details. Yours Sincerely, Sim.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to have a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Each section should flow into the next for better understanding.
task achievement
Check for grammar mistakes and word choice. Some phrases can be clearer, and using proper tenses is important.
positive
You provided good examples of contributions made by Mr. Sam.
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