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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided line graph depicts information about global
water
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use
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in
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for
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 three different
purpose
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purposes
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, including agriculture, industrial
use
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, and domestic
use
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. The table illustrates the
water
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 consumption in
Brazil
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 and
Congo
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 in 2000.
Overall
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, agriculture accounted for the largest proportion of global
water
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use
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while
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 Domestic represented
th
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the
 smallest share.
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,
Brazil
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 was the
dominat
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dominant
 figure in
water
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 consumption in 2000. Looking at
thw
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the
 data in more
detailed
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, Agricultural purposes stood at about 500 cubic
kilometres
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, it steadily increased and reached 1000 cubic
kilometres
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 in 1950. It experienced a dramatic
raise
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rise
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 by 2000 and reached 3000 cubic
kilometres
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. Industrial and Domestic
use
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 started
with
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 the same rate, both 0 cubic
kilometres
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, and they marginally increased by 1950. Industrial
use
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 rapidly rose to
exceeded
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 1000 cubic
kilometres
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,
whereas
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 domestic
use
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 steadily climbed to approximately 100 cubic
kilometres
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 by 2000. Regarding the countries,
Brazil
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 led in all indicators; its population was 176 million compared to just 5.2
millionin
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million in
Congo
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. The irrigated land size was 26,500 square
kilometers
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kilometres
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 in
Brasil
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Brazil
, vastly larger than
Congo
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's 100 square
kilometres
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.
Additionally
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,
water
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 consumption was respectively higher in
Brazil
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, accounting for 359 cubic meters,
whereas
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 it was merely 8 cubic meters in
Congo
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, brazil, congo, kilometres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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