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Some people think that the government should establish free libraries in each town. Others believe it is a waste of money since people can access the internet at home to obtain information. Discuss both the side and give your opinion.

There is no denying the fact that
government
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the government
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 should establish free
libraries
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 in each town.
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that it is a waste of money since can people access the
internet
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 at home to obtain information. To
being
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begin
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 with, the government should establish free
libraries
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 in each town.
Libraries
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plays
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play
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 a major role in forming public opinion.
In other words
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, it is very important for the students to have a
quite
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quiet
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 place to study.
Moreover
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,
the
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apply
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public
libraries
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is
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are
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 part of
readers
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readers'
reader's
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life
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lives
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. Another point to consider is that
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internet
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the internet
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 has changed the
readers
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reader's
readers'
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 and
students
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students'
student's
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life
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lives
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. When
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you visite
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visite
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visit
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 the library you will find it empty. Because the students can find their books on the
internet
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.
In addition
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, the
internet
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avoids
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prevents
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 them
to
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from
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 wasting gas to go to the library.
However
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, the readers can read everywhere by using the
internet
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.
For example
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, use the phone or use the
laptops
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laptop
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. In my view,
go
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going
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 to the public library is too hard and wasting time. The
internet
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 made our
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life
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lives
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 easier. In conclusion, despite people
have
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having
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 different views, I believe that the
internet
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is
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has
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 changed our
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life
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lives
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to
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for
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better
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the better
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.

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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly state your position on the topic. Make sure to mention both sides of the argument in a clear way.
coherence cohesion
Try to organize your paragraphs better. Each paragraph should have a clear main point and support it with examples or explanations.
task achievement
Use clearer examples. For instance, mention specific benefits of libraries or specific drawbacks of using only the internet.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure. There are some mistakes that make your ideas hard to understand.
task achievement
You introduced the topic well, and it is relevant to the task.
task achievement
You included both sides of the argument, which shows you understand the topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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