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Band 5.5

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map above illustrates the changes that Porth Harbour experienced from 2000 until now.
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, you can see the car parking locations remained the same,
however
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, the path to the lower parking changed from main road in 2000 to side road on the right hand.
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, the spot allocated to the showers and toilets on the north of the upper parking remained unchanged
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 another area now is dedicated to
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 matter on the north of the other parking.
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, another dock is added on the left of the old dock, but the public beach is still in the same area. Most of the development and construction happened in the south of the harbour.
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, on the left side of the lifeboat, cafes and shops have been built.
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, the castle in the southeast of the map was destroyed and gave its place to a hotel.
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, the public beach near the castle was
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 converted into a private beach, especially for the hotel members. And a subroute branched from the road to make its way toward the hotel.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use clear paragraphs to separate your ideas. A strong introduction and a conclusion can help summarize the main points.
task achievement
You could add more details or examples about the changes you mention, like specific new features introduced.
task achievement
You've done well to identify key changes in the harbour and make direct comparisons to the past.
coherence and cohesion
Your writing has a good overall flow and is easy to follow.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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