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02 June 2025, The line graph shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009.

The line graph depicts how many international
visitors
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 with different purposes in the UK from 1989 to 2009.
Overall
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, holiday purpose was the highest purpose over the period even though it showed a fluctuation. Meanwhile, the
number
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 of overseas
visitors
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 for business and
visit
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visits
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 to friends or relatives tended to rise with a small gap
both
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between both
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. In 1989, more than 6
million
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 people from other countries visited
to
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apply
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the UK for
holiday
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a holiday
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 and it rose in the following years, reaching around 9
million
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visitors
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 in 1999.
However
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,
this
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 figure dropped to 7
million
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 in 2004 before rebounding in 2009 at 7
million
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.
By comparison
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, there was a slight fall in the
number
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 of international businessmen from 5
million
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 in 1989 to 4
million
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 in around 1995. After that, the
number
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 was increased with a marginal steady and a slight drop in the final year, accounting for 7
million
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 in 2009.
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, from 1989 to 2004, the total
number
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 of overseas
visitors
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 skyrocketed by 3
million
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, rising from nearly 4
million
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 to 7
million
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.
However
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, it fell
of
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by
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 1
million
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 in the
last
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 five years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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