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Write a letter to your friend in another country where you like to visit for the holidays. In your letter, you should: Explain your travel plans. Describe the interesting places you plan to visit. Ask for suggestion for sightseeing options.

Dear Karan, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you about my visit
in
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 your country for the holidays.
To begin
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, I have booked my flight for the upcoming
sunday
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Sunday
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 evening from the National Airport
at
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in
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 Delhi to the YYZ airport
at
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in
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 Toronto and my travel duration is about 21 hours.
Also
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, I have
stay
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 in Dubai where I have planned to buy some presents for you.
Moreover
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, I would like to explore the beauty of your country. I have some places in mind to visit like the CN Tower which is in your city and
the
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Niagara Falls . One of my
friend
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friends
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 visited Canada
last
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 year and he recommended
me
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I
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to
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visit these places for sure.
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, I think you should
also
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 suggest
me
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 some tourist attractions of your nation. I believe that you know better about the interesting spots as you
are
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have been
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 residing in Canada
from
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for
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last
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the last
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 10 years. I hope we will meet soon. Yours lovingly, Harp

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main point.
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Make sure to use a friendly and warm tone, as this is a letter to a friend.
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Include more details about what you want to see and do in those places to make it more engaging.
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The letter has a clear purpose and communicates your travel plans well.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are friendly and appropriate for a letter to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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