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The given illustration displays various sources which emitted greenhouse gas in the UK between 1990 and 2010.

The given illustration displays various sources which emitted greenhouse
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gas
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gases
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 in the UK between 1990 and 2010.
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, most
fuel
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 sources decreased in
carbon
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emission
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 by the end of the timeframe,
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gas
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 witnessed a continuous influx in
carbon
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 pollutants.
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,
gas
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 was
also
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 the
fuel
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 which produced the most
carbon
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 in all recorded years, with the sole exception of 1990, when coal was the prominent
carbon
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 emitter. Regarding the 2 fossil fuels that emitted the most
carbon
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 in 1990,
gas
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 started with approximately 220
million
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tons
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 of produced
carbon
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 , which made it the least
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carbon emitting
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fuel
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 that year.
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, a continuous rise in
carbon
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emission
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 was recorded by
this
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fuel
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 source, when in 2010,
gas
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 had almost doubled in
carbon
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emission
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, reaching around 330
million
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tons
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. Coal,
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, despite beginning with over 300
million
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tons
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 of
carbon
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, dropped in numbers within the
incoming
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coming
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 decades. By 2010, coal was only producing around 170
million
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tons
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 of
carbon
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. Moving on to the remaining fossil
fuel
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, oil saw a fluctuation between around 270
million
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carbon
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 and 230
million
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 during the first 15 recorded years. Decreasing in
carbon
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emission
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, oil had over 200
million
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tons
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 of
carbon
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 emitted by 2010.

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Make sure to include a clear overview in your introduction that summarizes the main trends and patterns.
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Try to use linking words to connect your ideas better and make the text flow more smoothly.
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Provide more specific examples and data points to support your arguments, ensuring clarity in your descriptions.
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You provided a good overview of the main trends in greenhouse gas emissions.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a logical structure with a clear sequence of information.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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