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In many countries, it is common for families to own and run their own business. Some people think this is the best way to run a business, while others consider this a potential source of problems. What is your opinion?

Around the world the idea of family owned-
business
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 is becoming more and more popular , some opine that it is a better way to run a
business
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 others believe that it will conflict within the family.
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this
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 type of
business
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 has some disadvantages , in my view, family businesses can be highly successful when managed properly, but they require careful planning to avoid common problems
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business
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businesses
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 base their argument on the fact that
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 may disturb the peace and bring many avoided issues between family
members
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.
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 , family
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 may argue and fight about money issues and
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 may lead to family disputes because issues will be .
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, there are much more benefits that come with a
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business
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 .
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the concept that it will lead to more conflict actually
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 the fact that family
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 are working
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 each other all day the relationships between them will become stronger.One major benefit of family businesses is their strong sense of commitment. Family
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 often share a deep emotional connection to the company, which can drive long-term dedication and hard work.
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 , the work schedule will be adjusted depending on the situation and the circumstances of each family member.
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 , some of them may be students and need some time off to focus on their studies and exams.
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, any decisions that will be
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 will be in the best interest of the entire family. In conclusion, family businesses have both positive and negative aspects and
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 on the situation, can be profitable or harmful. Generally, in my perspective, whilst it should be decided by considering various aspects, the advantages of family-run firms
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its
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their
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 disadvantages.

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Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic.
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Use clearer connections between ideas and paragraphs to improve flow.
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Make sure all your sentences are complete and clear.
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You have a clear opinion and structure your essay with an introduction, body, and conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • commitment
  • understanding
  • trust
  • flexibility
  • decision-making
  • legacy
  • stability
  • conflicts of interest
  • professionalism
  • succession planning
  • nepotism
  • qualified
  • sustainability
  • leverage
  • risks
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