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The table below provides information about the three largest Pacific islands. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table below provides information about the three largest Pacific islands. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The table below compares between the three largest Pacific islands in terms of size and demographics.
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, Japan which is located in
the
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East Asia has the largest
number of
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population
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 , reaching 103 million despite
the
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 small size and the high
population
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 density per
kilometer
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,
with
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which
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 is 452.
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,
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 New Guinea shows
huge
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a huge
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 space with the lowest
number of
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population
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.
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, Sulawesi Island has a
number of
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population
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 of 18.5 million with a 106 density per Kilometer.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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