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Climate change is the biggest threat facing humanity today and in order to survive as a species we need to act now. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Climate
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change
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 is a big problem affecting many parts of our lives and the environment. Its main impacts are on our
weather
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, how safe our food is, and even what the
world
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 map looks like.
First,
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climate
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change
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 is making our
weather
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 unpredictable. The seasons don't follow their usual patterns anymore. Each year's
weather
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 is completely different from the
last
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. Studies show that sometimes we even skip a season or two, making the
weather
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 very unstable.
Second,
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climate
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change
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 puts our food supply at risk. It hurts the quality and amount of food we can grow. It's getting harder for farmers to have good harvests every year.
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, coffee farms around the
world
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 are struggling, and farmers are now looking for new places to grow coffee beans.
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,
climate
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change
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 is changing the
world
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 map.
This
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 is because global warming is causing water levels around the
world
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 to rise. Over time, many islands will disappear
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this
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 rise in sea levels.
This
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 shows how much our planet is changing, and we need to act now.

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Task Achievement
Add a clear opinion statement in your introduction that shows your main point about climate change.
Coherence and Cohesion
Link your ideas with words like 'first,' 'next,' and 'finally' to help the reader follow your points better.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples or data to support your main points, such as mentioning specific cases of crop failure due to climate change.
Content
You have identified important impacts of climate change clearly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure that helps the reader understand your points.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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