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The graph below shows the number of immigrants to three countries from 1990 to 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of immigrants to three countries from 1990 to 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
number
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 of
immigrants
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 to three countries is described in the graph. The data was collected from 1990 to 2001.
Overall
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, the annual immigration in
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USA
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the USA
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 followed
an
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a
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 downward trend
while
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 the
number
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 of
immigrants
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 in Canada and Australia followed an upward trend over the given
period
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. In detail,
according to
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 the
period
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 from 1990 to 1996, the most significant figure can be seen in
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USA
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the USA
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. The
number
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 of
immigrants
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 in the
USA
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 grew from 1400 to 1800 from 1991 to 1992. From 1992 to 1996, the value for
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USA
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the USA
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 underwent
an
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a
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 dramatic fall from 1800 to nearly 800.The value for Canada witnessed a steady rise from 200 to 300
over
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from
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 1991 to 1994 and
then
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fall
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fell
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into
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to
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 nearly 200 from 1994 to 1996.The value for Australia stayed
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unchanged
 at 150 over the given
period
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. Moving to the
period
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 from 1996 to 2001, the most significant can
also
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 be seen in the
USA
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. From 1996 to 1997, the
USA
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 saw a steady rise from nearly 800 to 930.The figure for
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USA
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the USA
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 remained fluctuating from 930 to 900 from 1997 to 2001.The
number
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 of
immigrants
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 in Canada and Australia remained
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unchanged
 from 1996 to 1999 and
then
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incresed
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increased
 by 210 and nearly 200, respectively.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, immigrants, usa, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immigration trends
  • significant increase/decrease
  • fluctuation
  • steadily
  • sharp spike/drop
  • over the given period
  • comparative analysis
  • growth pattern
  • immigrant numbers
  • variations
  • main features
  • highlighting
  • stark differences
  • overall trends
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