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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ' jncome in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ' jncome in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows the number of households in the US in terms of their annual earnings across the three years, which are 2007, 2011 and 2015.
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whereas
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 the lowest class was always the
one
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that
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apply
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the
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whose
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 annual income was between $75,000 and $99,999, the highest
group
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 was not the same for all three years. Specifically, the
quantity
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number
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 of families in the lowest sector was 14 in 2007, 13 in 2011 and 15 in 2015.
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, that of the second lowest
group
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, $50,000 - $74,999, was 21 every year, indicating that there was no reverse in the rank between these two groups.
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, the highest division experienced an alteration in 2011. In detail,
while
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 the category, $100,000 or more, had the greatest records in 2007 and 2015 with figures of 29 and 33, the number of
this
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 section dropped to 28 in 2011 and ranked in the third position.
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, in the same year, the highest
group
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 was the
one
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 whose yearly income was from $25,000 to $49,999 followed by the
one
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 whose annual earnings were less than $25,000. In comparison, the largest numerical difference between the highest
group
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 and the lowest
one
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 was 18 in 2015 when the count of households earning over $100,000 was 33 and that of families whose earnings were between $75,000 and $99,999 was 15.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words one, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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