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Some people think that it is important to have a single language as an international official language. Others think that it will make it difficult to identify countries and cause a loss of culture. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion. Support your answer with examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Many
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 believe that it is essential to have
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uniform
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language
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 around the world,
while
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 others believe that countries may lose their identifications.
However
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, there are advantages of communication and learning ,
as well as
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 the disadvantages of personality and
language
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 extinction to consider.
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 with, the best
advantages
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 of having
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uniform
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language
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 is that
people
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 can communicate with each other easily
becuase
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because
 there is one
language
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 in the world, which means that
people
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 do not find
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it difficult
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 to
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understand
 each other.
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,
people
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 often have many friends from cultural diversity. Another positive aspect of having
an
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uniform
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language
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 is that it helps students to learn easily
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because
 textbooks are one
language
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.
In other words
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,
people
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 will not face
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 in advanced concepts when they learn.
As a result
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, students will learn deeply even with hard
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subjects
. On
other
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 hand, the biggest
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disadvantage
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 is that countries may lose their
idenitity
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identity
 because the
language
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 is an
essestial
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essential
 part of country identification, which means that countries might lose their
hertiages
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heritage
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, traditions, customs and cultures because those have reliable connections with the
language
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. Another negative aspect of having
an
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uniform
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language
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 is that almost 7000
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language
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languages
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 will become
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extinct
.
As a consequence
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, knowledge might disappear because some languages are linked to ancient civilizations that
people
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 might not be able to
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understand
 which is an awful negative of having
an
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uniform
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language
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. In conclusion, I believe that the advantages of having
an
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uniform
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language
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 are better than
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 because
people
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 can learn easily.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. This will help readers understand your viewpoint.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', 'on the other hand' to help the flow of your ideas.
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Try to use a variety of vocabulary and avoid repeating the same words like 'uniform language'.
coherence and cohesion
Check for spelling mistakes, such as 'because' and 'identity', to make your writing clearer.
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You provided different viewpoints, showing a good understanding of the topic.
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Your examples about communication and culture loss are relevant and show some depth in your thinking.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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