The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie chart shows average monthly student expenditure in the UK in 2016. The bar chart shows sources of student income in the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The first pie
chart
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illustrates the average
in
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expenditure
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monthly from
students
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,
while
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the bar
chart
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depicts the percentage of different
income
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sources of
students
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.
Overall
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,
while
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the amount of rent made up the most of
expenditure
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, the most
income
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of
students
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come
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from student loan courses.
Additionally
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,
students
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spend a minor
expenditure
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on travel and
also
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gain a small
income
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Regarding the pie
chart
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where the
expenditure
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for rent has stood out at others at roughly 385$.
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, both the debt
of
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socialising and
also
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bills were just 64$ and 64$, respectively.
The
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similar trend can be seen in
expenditure
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on Other and food,
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food
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the food
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was 124$, Another fee is
also
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near that number at 91$.
However
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, the money paid for travel was the least of all, just at 52$. Taking a look
to
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the remaining
chart
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where
students
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'
income
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mostly came from loans accounting for over 80% and
also
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double the proportion from grants and funding
income
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. As for both an
income
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from family and a
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part-time
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job, they were approximately
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75%.
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, not only
income
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from savings but
also
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from bank overdrafts made up 50% with a minor disparity.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, expenditure, students, income with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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