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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, customers in many nations can go to the supermarket to buy foods produced around the world. I strongly believe that
this
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 is a good development because
people
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 will have more choices to choose what they prefer. In recent years , the advancement of
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food
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 has significant changes.
People
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 can buy the imported
food
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 at the supermarket . They can try different kinds of
food
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 in their living area. Do not have to spend a lot of time
travel
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 to another country to try their feature
food
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. The individuals can try many things in their places.
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 , spend a lot of time
traveling
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 to another nation only
for
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try some foods that they are not familiar with. It wastes time ,
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, if
people
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 do not enjoy the
food
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 very much. They may have a bad impression of the country. There are some
fruits-only
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 plants in the specific climate systems.
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 ,In Thailand, there is a fruit called durian. Some
people
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 said
its
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 smells bad
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 , others enjoy the smell of the fruits. In Taiwan
people
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 can buy durian in the supermarket. Individuals can try it the need to travel only for the fruit
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, some
people
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 cannot afford to travel
in
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 different countries.
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,
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people
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 who enjoy durian very much can buy it every day to taste the
food
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 they like.
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 , buying different kinds and exploring new types of
food
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 in their country are significant improvements and can experience more things.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and flows logically to the next. Use linking words to connect your ideas better.
task achievement
Try to elaborate on your points with clearer explanations. This will help the reader understand your ideas better.
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You provided relevant examples, like the durian fruit, showing a specific aspect of food choices.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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