Many people argue that museums and art galleries should present the nation's art, as opposed to artwoks from other countries. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that
museums
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and
art
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galleries should
presnet
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present
the nation's
art
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,
while
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others believe that
art
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from
diffrent
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different
country
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can be
invlovd
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involved
.
This
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essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion.
Musems
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Museums
are
an
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crucial front for the country,
morefore
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more fore
more for
. The
museums
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attrach
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attract
attach
many
vistiors
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visitors
around the world. 
In
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one
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hand, People who agree that only the nation's arts are allowed in the
museums
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or the
art
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galleries
sees
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see
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that
it
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it is
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more related to the
culuter
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culture
or the land they live in
as
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and as
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result
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a result
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of that the disagreement comes from the fear of
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erasing
releasing
the history, for an instance, the king
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art
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gallery has the whole gallery full of the
saudi
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Saudi
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culuter
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culture
related items
such
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as
stautues
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statues
and paintings for the royal family and the old city.
On the other hand
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, people who disagree
the
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perspective
they
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apply
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have that
are
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is a universal language and humans around the world should share it,
in addition
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, the
monaliza
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Monalisa
mona liza
painting was
origanily
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originally
painted by
a
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an
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italian
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artist and ended up to be in one of the biggest
museume
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museums
museum
around the world and visitors come to see it and spend money which is a good deal for the country.
In
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me
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peronal perpective
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personal perspective
I see that
museums
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should have
bothe
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both
it can be two
sepearted secations
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separate sections
in one place where
vistiors
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visitors
can
experince
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experience
the nation's
art
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or the
forigner
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foreign
art
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.
To sum
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up
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up,
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Art
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is
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a beautifual
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beautifual
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beautiful
thing and we as humans should share it.

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