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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given charts represent how relatable
crime
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 is to
age
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 and four different kinds of
crime
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 committed in the British both of which are recorded in the period of the
last
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 year. A brief overview is that the 20-year-olds had the highest
crime
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 rate
whereas
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 children from 0-8 years old showed the opposite.
Additionally
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, violent
crime
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 took up most of the percentage of
crime
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.
This
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 analysis will start with the first chart where the relationship between
age
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 and
crime
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 is shown. Regarding the 0-20-year-old citizens in the UK, the figures saw a significant climb from 0 to 8 hundred thousand crimes despite those who are 0 to 8 years of
age
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 not committing any
crime
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. As far as the rest of the
age
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 groups were concerned, it decreased sharply from 8 to 2 tens of thousand crimes only to steadily decline to 40 thousand for 60-year-old British citizens. Attention will now turn to what types of crimes people in the UK committed. Concerning public order
crime
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, those charged for
this
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 type accounted for 9% of the whole graph. As for the others, violent
crime
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, at 46%, modestly exceeded the sum of property-and-drug-related
crime
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 by a margin of 1%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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