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Some people believe that planning for the future is a waste of time because they think that focusing on the present is more important. To what extent do you agree?

It is argued that planning for the
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 is pointless and that living in the moment is of greater value.
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 suggestion because planning for the
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 keeps life in order and preparing for the
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 life can prevent potential distress. First and foremost,
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 arrangements helps individuals keep their lives in order because they know beforehand what to do in the
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, the people who always plan for the
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 tend to
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complete
 all their tasks perfectly on
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 about work efficiency and work-life balance, most individuals, who are successful both in their professional and personal lives, always plan their
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, preparing for the
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 can play a major role in preventing possible unwanted irritation.
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 to say, if people set goals for the
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, they will try to achieve them by being hard-working.
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, these people do not just waste their
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successful person achieving their goals.
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, different undesirable circumstances may come across
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 without preparing.
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, many sportsmen fail in competitions and students fail in exams because of a lack of preparation. In conclusion, I totally disagree with
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 is just wasting
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 because planning can be a key factor to live successfully and to avoid failure.

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Language
Make sure to use correct spelling for words like 'survey' and 'complete'.
Content
Add more specific examples to strengthen your points. For example, mention specific individuals or well-known events.
Structure
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea that connects to your topic. It helps in maintaining focus.
Content
Your introduction clearly states your position on the topic.
Content
You have good reasoning in your arguments about the importance of planning.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • unexpected expenses
  • career advancement
  • long-term goals
  • structured approach
  • personal development
  • educational goals
  • fulfilling life
  • spontaneous experiences
  • emotional fulfillment
  • embrace opportunities
  • mental health
  • reduce stress and anxiety
  • mindfulness
  • balanced approach
  • flexibility and adaptation
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