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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors who satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors who satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The data illustrates two different types of information about Ashdown Museum, which are about the number of visitors and their
satifcation
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satisfaction
 levels during the years
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before and after renovation.
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, there is a slight increase in terms of
people
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 visited,
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 survey results change significantly. In the year prior to refurbishment, 74000
people
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 went to the museum.
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,
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 number rose by 18000 and reached
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92000 in the year after the repair.
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, the percentage of
people
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 who answered very satisfied and satisfied surged from 15% to 35%, and from 30% to 40%, respectively, after the renovation.
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, only 15% of individuals were dissatisfied with the museum in comparison with its condition before the repair. Yet there is only a small change in terms of the level of
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 dissatisfaction, which merely declined
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%.
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, 5% of
people
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 decided not to give a response in both questionnaires.

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