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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the average data of
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dioxide
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 emission for each
people
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 in the British，Sweden，Italy and Portugal over the period of 30 years starting from 1967.
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it is clear that
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 the average
amount
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 exhaled by people had
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obvious decrease trend both in The United Kingdom and Sweden. The figure for
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dioxide
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emissions
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 with each dividend witnessed a significant increase from 1967 to 2007.
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 with, in 1967, the
amount
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 by each citizen was more than 6 metric
tonnes
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 in both the UK and Sweden, which is around 11 metric
tonnes
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 and almost 9 metric
tonnes
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 respectively between these 2 countries . we can see that the
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dioxide
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amount
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 in
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UK kept slightly declining
at
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 the following 30 years.
on the other hand
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，the data for Sweden fluctuated to sharped full to around 5 metric
tonnes
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 2007. The
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 of The United Kingdom dropped by around 2 metric
tonnes
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 in 2007,
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 the
amount
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 of
emissions
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 still
take
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 high place among those 4 countries. Looking at Italy and Portage, these 2 countries kept average
carbon
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dioxide
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 below 5 metric
tonnes
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 in 1967, with around 4.3 metric
tonnes
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 in Italy and 1.8 metric
tonnes
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 in Portage.
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 , these figures keep growing to reach 7.8 metric
tonnes
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 in Italy and 5.7 metric
tonnes
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 in Portage in 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, amount, emissions, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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