Many criminals commit further crime as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What possible solutions can you suggest?

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released
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less
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opportunities
and lack of
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support
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,
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government
,
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and well being of a person can change
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trend. The main
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for ex-prisoners is employment.
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to check background information to hire someone on the
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.
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is the reason prisoners did not get offers from any jobs, which leads them to do more crimes
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as theft and Store
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theft
to earn
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bread and butter. Moving forward to
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another
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reason, Lack of support from their social
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neighbourhood
and family numbers. Once they go back to
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normal
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nobody is ready to accept them as before they were. If they try to find ties and
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affection
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they easily get hate from
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.
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, they want to join
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again,
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the
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non-accombing
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behaviour
and ignorance
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them to
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more crimes.
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can be
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solved
by
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government authorities
, they need to make some special places or establish
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compaines
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companies
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like where ex-criminals can get a
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and support themselves with a decent
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.
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and nearby
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surroundings
play
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role
to regain
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the confidence to live, which easily
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them a part of
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world.
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people who know them invite in their social
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gatherings
, if they take part in
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discussions
discussion
.
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will result in
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rule breaking
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activites
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activities
and motivate them to live
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life
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outside. In conclusion, All things considered,
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inadequate
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behaviour
in
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and criminal
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background
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checks to get
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job
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a job
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could be the reasons to
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commit
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crime
but
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this
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can be actioned by
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
by establishing special
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opprunities
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opportunities
and better social treatment
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that can
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lead them to
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live in better surrondings.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reintegration
  • rehabilitation
  • recidivism
  • mental health
  • economic challenges
  • peer pressure
  • stigma
  • discrimination
  • vocational training
  • counseling
  • community support
  • criminal networks
  • adaptation
  • coping mechanisms
  • survival
  • education programs
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