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Band 3

Some people think that youngsters should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community. Are disadvantages of this requirement greater than the benefits for the community and individuals?

Nowadays society
think
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 that teenagers should go out and do unpaid
work
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benefting
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benefiting
 people in the community, in
this
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i
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 will be talking about the advantages and the disadvantages of that topic some people see that doing unpaid
work
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 being young is beneficial and here is why, it will make them involved within
the
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society, communicating with people rather than spending hours watching movies and playing games,
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 they will gain massive
experince
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experience
 in many different ways like getting used to the pressure when you
work
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 or being more productive so forth so on, which
maybe
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 a fair argument. meanwhile, others assume that no one should
work
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 without getting paid whether they are young or not,
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instead
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 they
belive
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believe
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 that youngsters better focus on developing their skills and
concetrate
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concentrate
 on studying rather than going out and
waste
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 hours of their time
on
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 a place that they will never get something in return from,
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addition
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 they said that the
experince
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experience
 is earned by time and when they get older they will have it what so ever. in conclusion, each side had
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good arguments and excuses,
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 I suppose that working isn't bad
in
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such
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age
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 even if
its
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 not paid because they will be
experinced
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experienced
in
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 a young age and
would
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will
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 learn new skills that are priceless.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Use paragraphs to separate ideas clearly. Each paragraph should focus on a single point.
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Provide specific examples to support your points, such as types of unpaid work that can be helpful.
task achievement
You have covered both sides of the argument, which shows you understand the topic well.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your views, which is good for wrapping up the essay.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • youngsters
  • unpaid work
  • community
  • skills
  • teamwork
  • responsibility
  • work experience
  • empathy
  • bonds
  • helping one another
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