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The rise of social media platforms has made it easier for people to vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. What is the consequence of this trend? Is there any benefit to expressing complaints on social media? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Consequence
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 of the rise of frustrations and complaints on
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apply
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social
media
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 platforms and benefits for society.
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 essay discusses
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benefit
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to
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of
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 expressing complaints on social
media
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 and
consequences
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the consequences
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 of
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 trend.
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, I am going to give my own opinion and examples from my knowledge. The consequence of rising
this
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 trend should be positive, because
people
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 manage to find support in crisis situations from other
people
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 with the same trouble or who
know
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have made
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 a decision.
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 research by psychologists and scientific magazines shows that sharing problems helps to accept trouble
easier
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more easily
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 and helps mentally with
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. And
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 but not least, social
media
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 provides being strong, paying attention to yourself and improving environment. Meanwhile, in
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media
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the media
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environment
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environment,
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 we can find stories of
people
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 who have very difficult
life
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 problems. They show how disadvantages switch into advantages, get profit, change lifestyle, get positive meetings with new
people
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 or groups with the same thinking. On
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basis
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basis,
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 we are able to say that
benefits
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the benefits
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 considerably outweigh its disadvantages. In conclusion, I am going to tell my own story
which
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looks
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does
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 not
like
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 a large problem but had an important effect
in
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on
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 my
life
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. During my student
life
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 in
school
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school,
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 I had cases which included abuse from other students, and sharing my stories helped me find
people
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 who supported me with motivation, changing friends, lifestyle, improving my positive sides, speaking skills, health and providing
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a positive
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 lifestyle.
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 case had a big impact on my
life
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 at the
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.

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organization
The plan is ok but some parts do not flow well. Use a clean order: first state the problem, then give a clear view on benefits, then give a short closing note.
content
Give both sides of the view. Even if you think there is a good side, say where it can fail and how talk can hurt or help.
content
Use more detail from your own life or a clear example to show your point. State what happened, what you did, and what you learned.
grammar
Fix grammar and use short, direct sentences. Avoid long lines that slow pace.
content
You have a clear view and you share a real life story that fits the topic.
structure
You try to show more than one idea, not just one side.
content
The idea that talk on social media can help some people is said from the heart.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accountability
  • Public venting
  • Reputation management
  • Social media platform
  • Complaining culture
  • Community solidarity
  • Conflict resolution
  • Entitlement
  • Direct communication
  • Customer service
  • Exposure
  • Misinformation
  • Amplification
  • Systemic issues
  • Constructive feedback
  • Online atmosphere
  • Negative content
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