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Writing Samples
Band 1

Many people believe that international tourism has negative implications on their countries. What are the reasons for it? What can be done to change this negative attitude towards international tourism?

There is no denying
the
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that
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 international
tourism
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 has negative implications on their
countries
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.
Linking Words
while
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While
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 it is a commonly held belief that it is a good thing. To
being
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begin
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 with, international
tourism
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 is very important
on
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in
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 our life
Linking Words
this
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at this
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 time.
In other words
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,
the
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apply
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international
tourism
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 plays a major role in
this
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 world.
For instance
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, travelling to
honymoon
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honeymoon
 to new places to have
different
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a different
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experience
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experiences
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.
In addition
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, visit new
countries
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 after hard work with our family .
The international
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International
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tourism
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 has negative effects on our
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countries
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country's
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 economy.
More over
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Moreover
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, it gives
bad
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a bad
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 reputation
about
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to
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 our
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countries
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country
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 if go outside your country every vacation.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, as a
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citizen
citize
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citize,
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 you must have a knowledge of the brilliant places to go. In conclusion, despite people
have
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having
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 many opinions, I believe that
the
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apply
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travelling outside your country
effects
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affects
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 badly on
you
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your
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country
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country's
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 economy.

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task achievement
Develop your main points further. Explain why some people believe international tourism is harmful.
coherence
Make sure your paragraphs have a clear order and connect well. Use linking words to make this clearer.
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Give more specific examples to support your ideas, like explaining the economic effects better.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion that international tourism can be negative, which is good for task response.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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